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Information Technology Consultant - 00059223 <o:p></o:p>

Dear Mrs Reisenbichler<o:p></o:p>

I have read your job advertisement on accenture.com and would like to apply for the position as Information Technology Consultant.<o:p></o:p>

At the moment, I am studying Business Information Technology at the University of 1) Applied Sciences Northwestern Switzerland, Olten. During my studies 2)I was able to enhance my skills in various practically oriented projects in application development, IT-architecture, enterprise application integration and data warehousing.<o:p></o:p>

When I read your job advertisement I was immediately confident that I am the right person for accenture. The skills that I acquired during my training and still-young career coincide exactly with your requirements and ideas. My analytical and conceptual skills are distinct and allow a high degree of customer orientation.<o:p></o:p>

In my previous, very diverse activities, I have learned in hectic times to always keep a cool head. I enjoy working in a team and make a point of completing every task assigned to me independently, 3) conscientious, and 4) motivated.<o:p></o:p>

5) In that regard, I would appreciate the opportunity to meet with you to discuss my qualifications and the possibility of joining your organization. Please find enclosed my resume for your 6) review. I 7) look forward to hearing from you.<o:p></o:p>
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Yours sincerely,<o:p></o:p>

Verbesserungsvorschläge:

1) Der Uniname hört sich für mich etwas merkwürdig an. (richtig abgeschrieben?)

2) Falls der Prozess noch nicht abgeschlossen sein sollte, würde ich "I have been able to" schreiben.

3) conscientiously (Adverb, da Bezug auf "completing")

4) and with (fervent / unrelenting) motivation.

5) Wendung ist mir so nicht bekannt. (Thus / As a consequence etc.)

6) review = Buchbesprechung (richtiges Wort?)

7) I am looking forward to hearing...

Der Rest ist sehr gut formuliert.

Gruß,

Sapphire Sky

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